Chasing Robin

[TogetherAgain]

prawncracker: ha, the rainbow connection connection! See, I told you it sounds weird. Glad you like that last line.

Count: a slight jab, yes. Wasn't originally intended to be one, but then it turned into one, so... yeah. And what's next? Well, I have a deleted scene in this here notebook of mine, I've been thinking what I want for commentary the whole time I've been writing, a making of could be cool, and bloopers are always fun. So to answer your question, I have no idea, and I'll keep you posted.

Beauregard: glad you like it! Thank you for mentioning that paragraph, especially, I put a lot of thought into it.

 

[Beauregard]

I dId. I did. The only problem with your ending...is that it means all the spot-lights/preasure is on me since Prawn and Lisa's stories are finished. I must confess my story is going to be much longer than these two...we are only halfway through the first of four sections of my story (Winter, spring, summer, autumn).

Can't wait for the blooper-reel!

 

[TogetherAgain]

Deleted Scene One

I started writing this scene right after Robin left the Sesame Street folks, and then realized it didn't quite get Robin to where he needed to be. The idea was that he got help from a Hassidic Rabbi. Basically it's my crazy Jewish side coming out. We'll start one paragraph before this scene begins.

Meanwhile Robin was running just as fast as he could. Junior had seen him and was now chasing him. Robin knew he had to hide.

Deleted scene

He saw a man dressed in black pants and a black jacket with a black hat on and a long black beard. He was loading boxes into a van. Well maybe...

"Excuse me, sir?" Robin said.

The man turned. "Yes? How may I help you?" he asked.

"Could I please hide in your van?" Robin asked.

"What from?" the man asked.

"A man who wants to kill me," Robin said.

The man raised his eyebrows. "Go right ahead," he said.

"Thank you!" Robin said as he hopped in and hid behind a stack of boxes. The man put another box in the van and turned to see a young man running towards him. Robin poked his head out and said, "That's who I'm hiding from!" Then he ducked back down.

"Excuse me, sir," Junior said when he reached the van.

"Ah, hello, young man!" the bearded man said. "How are you on this fine Thursday evening?"

"I'm good," Junior said, "but-"

"Oh that is so good to hear!" the man said. "Allow me to introduce myself. I am Rabbi Shlomo Levine. I'm delivering food for Shabbat dinner to those who cannot afford it. Who are you?"

"I'm Junior Hopper. I'm looking for-"

"Nice to meet you, Mr. Hopper," Shlomo interrupted. "Tell me, what do you do for a living?"

"Well my dad and I have a frog leg restaurant, but-"

"WHAT?" Shlomo said. "Oh, sir, frog legs are not Kosher!" He proceeded to go into a long drawn out lecture on what animals are Kosher. Flustered, Junior walked away a few sentences into it.

end of deleted scene

So why does the scene end there? Quite simple, really, that's when I realized it wouldn't work with the plot. I enjoyed writing it, I thought it was kind of cute, especially because it would have been the second time we saw Junior getting all stuck in conversation while trying to catch Robin. But I'm not sure how much of the comedy was... oh, how to put this without sounding rude or prejudiced... how much of it was harder to understand for people who don't know as much about Judaism. So I'm very curious as to other people's reactions to this little scene that landed on the cutting-room floor of my notebook.

 

[TogetherAgain]

Comments? Anyone? Anybody? Anybody? Please?

 

[The Count]

Didn't know Bueler was in this story. Anyway, give us a break. We're on heavy congested northbound traffic lanes chasing Robin with the rest of the Muppets.

An OK scene. Guess I'm thinking a bit too much if I said Shlomo was a joke name? If you want some Jewish comedy, though sterotype-cast a bit too much, you should check out the TV movie The Hebrew Hammer from Comedy Central Productions.
The thing is, didn't you refer to a van in the trailer for the story? But maybe you're right, this detour might not have served to get Robin en route to the theater. Besides, he wouldn't have caught the bus... Literally.

 

[TogetherAgain]

Shlomo is just me trying to make it painstakingly obvious that he's Jewish, since he wasn't originally going to be a rabbi. One of my main problems with this scene- besides the plot difficulties- is that although I myself am Jewish, I'm not too good with Jewish stereotypes. I'm always afraid I'll sound anti-Semetic when I use them, and that would be REALLY REALLY REALLY bad. So... yeah, deleted for a reason.

 

[Beauregard]

Ahha! I found that scene quite hilarious. First, how the rabbi just let a random frog hide in his van. Then Robin poppign his head out, "That's who I'm hiding from." Then the ending paragraph was very funny.

But, yes, it would have looked steriotypish.

Beau

 

[TogetherAgain]

Right. So, let's just put that deleted scene behind us- <shoves deleted scene into closet> and we'll- <closet door breaks open and deleted scene comes out> um, oh dear- <shoves deleted scene under bed> like I was saying, we'll- <deleted scene pops out from under bed> grrrr! <pushes deleted scene out door> Now then, we'll- <deleted scene walks back in the open door> Alright, deleted scene, would you please leave?

deleted scene: I just wanted to borrow some paper... but alright... <deleted scene walks out>

Great, now I feel guilty. Anyway, let's move on to something tried and true- commentary!

 

[TogetherAgain]

commentary Hey folks, this here's TogetherAgain, also known as Lisa, also known as the crazy girl who wrote this story. I'm here to interupt whenever I feel like it and give you either some commentary, some comic relief, or a combination thereof. So let's get right down to it. We start with the prologue. I've never written a prologue before, but I felt it was necessary since it seemed awkward to just all of a sudden have Doc Hopper come back. end commentary​

What happens to villains after they are defeated? The stories never tell. We follow the heroes home in victory and cheer for their happily-ever-afters, while the villains are abandoned in the dust. But they don’t always die. So what happens to them? Where do they go? Is there a secret hide out somewhere that defeated villains retire to?

commentary Can't you just see a bunch of old guys with walkers and wheelchairs, playing Bingo, going back and forth with their stories? "Well I robbed ten banks in one day alone." "That's nothing, I robbed twenty banks in one day." "Yes, but I broke into Fort Knox and would have gotten away with it if it weren't for James Bond." I think it's such an amusing mental picture, I'll have to use it again some time. end commentary​

Do they scrap their evilness all together? Or do they simply hide it, start over, letting the years pass by, rehashing their plans, waiting for the perfect time to strike again...

commentary I hope that wasn't too creepy. Because I know if I had read something like that when I was little, I would have checked under my bed to make sure IT wasn't there. Wait, I did that without reading something like this... never mind. Let's just get on with the story, shall we? end commentary​

 

[Beauregard]

Lisa...lisa...lisa...you never fail to crack me up!!!