Gorgon Heap
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Drat, I just figured out a way to improve the cold opening of the above:
After George takes away the varnish Red was given as coffee:
Scooter: "Can I get you anything else?"
Red: "Yeah, a nice big glass of battery acid."
Scooter: "Battery acid?!"
Red: "Yeah, with luck someone will get it wrong again."
Last line is tricky (still not just right), but you get the idea.
David "Gorgon Heap" Ebersole
After George takes away the varnish Red was given as coffee:
Scooter: "Can I get you anything else?"
Red: "Yeah, a nice big glass of battery acid."
Scooter: "Battery acid?!"
Red: "Yeah, with luck someone will get it wrong again."
Last line is tricky (still not just right), but you get the idea.
David "Gorgon Heap" Ebersole