Swamp Call

[Kimp the Shrimp]

ok i'll wait

 

[Just J]

So much comic potential.

If I were Kermit, I would totally be cool with Maggie dating most anyone from the TMS crew: Fozzie, a bear with a heart of gold; Rowlf, loyal and wise; Gonzo, never boring and a true friend. Maybe not Animal, but he's the only guy I can think of.

Now, the MT! cast, that's a different story. I don't think any of 'em are brother-in-law material - Johnny, Pepe, Clifford? No way. They are dogs, and not good dogs, like Rowlf. Maybe Sal. MAYBE.

Keep it coming!

 

[redBoobergurl]

Geeze I'm away for the afternoon and I miss everything! I feel so bad I wasn't able to read this right away! Anyway, so far I LOVE it, once again, you have hooked me from the very first word of chapter one. I love how Maggie calls Kermit "Mit". It is so cute and sisterly and I want to learn more about her and wow. Anyway, it's late, so I'll re-read tomorrow and post other thoughts I have.

 

[Effralyo]

I w`ike that C`wiffy`s `ere....
If I`d be asked to compare the story with something, I`d compare it with a light summer rain: as brilliant and sparkling, and leaves a "silvery print on the heart". Glark!

 

[theprawncracker]

Great second chapter Lisa! I loved it! And I'm happy Robin is okay with Maggie being there. It kinda worried me for a minute.

 

[redBoobergurl]

All right, now that I'm more awake and read the whole thing again, I can give you a detailed review of chapter one and two. You always do this for people, so I'm doing it for you.

There! A frog, slightly darker shade of green than him, with long eyelashes. She was an extremely attractive lady frog, and she knew it. She was confident, despite being confused.

I like how you don't explain exactly who she is at first. It makes us go "old girlfriend? Sister? Aquaintance?" Leaving us guessing for a little bit was brilliant!

“Hey, Mit!” she said as she hugged him.

I already mentioned how much I love that she calls him "Mit" It's so cute and right away we know this is someone who has known Kermit for years.

Everyone immediately scattered, including Miss Piggy, who had seen and heard everything from the door of her dressing room. A moment or two later, Clifford came back. He folded his arms across his chest and leaned on Kermit’s desk. Kermit looked at him.

I was waiting for Miss Piggy to come and get jealous because she didn't know it was his sister! And I expect she'll still be jealous even after she knows it's his sister because she doesn't like anyone stealing her frog's attention!

She laughed. “Mit, do you ever wonder if you’re absolutely insane?”
“In this place?” he said. “Every day.”

I just loved this line, it really made me laugh!

The swamp. She shook her head, remembering why she had so urgently taken the train that morning. It was easy to put it off, so long as there was something else in the swamp her brother wanted to know about. But she knew there wasn’t really much time.

Ok, now we know there is so much more to Maggie than just being Kermit's sister. She's got a secret. I'm beginning to feel real compassion about her character and I want to know more about her!

“Your frog?” Maggie laughed with a devious twinkle in her eye. “Listen, Pig. I’ve known Mit since we were pollywogs. If anyone here can claim him, it’s me. Not some pig that he happened to hire as some sort of chorus-girl.”

Oh I love how she's toying with her! This is comedy gold! I can see this whole scene being played out!

“Ha!” Kermit said. “Those who live in glass houses, Miss Margaret the Frog.”

There are tons of good lines in this whole set, but I liked this one the best. It's really a great brother/sister scene and we're beginning to see how close Kermit is to his sister. I laughed alot reading this whole part.

Excellent stuff Lisa, I'm amazed at how you crank out story after story! Keep up the good work!

 

[Beauregard]

Wow! This fan-fic is so light and breezy and wonderfull and cool and clever and delightfull and smile-making. I promise I shall not forget to read it! I loved how she arrived, and the moment Kermit said he was her brother was amazing!!! I almost fell of my seat in relief!!!

Whahhaaha!

 

[G-MAN]

This is a wonderful story, possibly even better then your last one. As the cast of Grease would say "Tell me more, tell me more."

 

[Beauregard]

And here's the bits that I loved...!

There! A frog..

Oh nice! A good narrator voice. we're in Kermit's mind, and we're seeing it all! Spotting her! There!

“Oh, sure! No problem!” she said. “But in that case, you get to carry my luggage.”

Ooh, nice character for her! But...who is she? Will Piggy be jealous?

“So tell me, Maggie, how’s everything in the swamp?”

I see. Play it like that. Tell us Nada...how rude! We'll haftta keep guessing!

“Okay okay I’ll relax,” Fozzie said. He put the pen down. Then he started tapping his hand on the desk.

Hahahaha! *cough* I mean, how humerous...

“Don’t. Even. Think about it,” he said, glaring at them.

What's up with him? Does he love her???

Kermit glared at him. “Clifford, Maggie’s my sister,” he said.

You could'a knocked me down with a feather!!!

 

[minor muppetz]

great

This is better than your Summer In The Theatre story. I can't wait to find out whether Kermit getting his banjo in the swamp really was an accident or done on purpose.