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Well.. The part with Bear I liked as it helps connect the rewrites/altered version very seemlessly and works in your favor. The nitpicks, I'd have to read it all again with time to sit down and point 'em out. Which is why I suggest you read it to yourself or have someone else read it to see if those little things get caught. The most frequent one is "the both of them" or other usages when it should be just "both of them", though in one or two cases the former is correct.
Like I said, would have to read everything again, don't have the time fright now. But post more as I'm rully digging the story... And I know the big subway fight where the gang from SS shows up is coming up soon.
Like I said, would have to read everything again, don't have the time fright now. But post more as I'm rully digging the story... And I know the big subway fight where the gang from SS shows up is coming up soon.