Bill Bubble Guy's muppets tonight outline idea

[MartyMuppets]

Yes the old men's joke is a tad lengthy I must admit. I'll have to think about how to shorten it down so that it still says what I mean it to imply. The swift wits skit seemed to be perfect for the Count I need to think for a while about what else I can do with this.
Hmm Perhaps Sal could at least ask Andy and Randy what sort of treatment they recommend he give Johnny and the Monkey may be naive enough to go along with the bandages heavily doused in metho routine. In any case the idea is for poor Johnny to be made sick so somebody else has to play the vampire and you're right Ed it's basically bare-boned though I did do a good script of the cold opening. But I would like to expand it to a script one day and I started watching the episodes I have taped for ideas on how to write Muppets Tonight

 

[The Count]

Well... At least you've got the source material to inspire you, a good starting point.
As for shortening the joke and still conveying what you want to say... Mayhaps: "Oh, please, let there be more commercials now!"
Reason I said bare-bones, was... Seems a bit rushed to me. Mayhaps if you take one post to develop each scene/sketch in full it'd seem more complete that way.
Just some suggestions.

 

[MartyMuppets]

At the moment I've bumped my TMS outlines up hoping Gorgon Heap will be able to give me some advice on writing a script version of them.

One day I'd like to do the same for this MT outline when the basic skeleton is put together but for now I'd like to share an idea I had for a Seymour and Pepe sketch

THE ENTERTAINERS

S and P attempt to perform The Entertainer as a break from all the spooky related skits tonight. A miniature curtain is placed on stage with a cord to pull to open it and they get behind it P holding the cord.

S: Now the curtain is going up. (P pulls the cord only to have the curtain fall over and crash on the floor)
P: Ah the entertainers are taking their bow. (As S bows he stumbles over the fallen curtain and it flies up into P's face) (They get back up.)
S: Do their dance steps. (S steps on P's foot while he's dancing)
P: Screaming: And sing their songs. (sounds rather pitiful as he sings in lots of pain)
S: Even get all the audience to sing along.
P: Recovered: What song would you like to sing folks?
Audience all together: Why do we always come here? I guess we'll never know! It's like a kind of torture to watch these clowns on this show!
P: Oh they know just what they will do.
S: So Pepe what'll we do?
P: I don't know man.
S: Know how to bring down the house when they're through.
Crazy Harry: Did you say you wanna bring down the house? I'll help you bring it down with dynamite! HA HA HA HA
S and P: AAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!
Big explosion blasts part of the set in the background as Harry runs off laughing maniacally. S and P regain their composure.
P: Snappy patter and jokes.
S: Hey Pepe. Why'd the chicken cross the road?
P: I don't know Seymour. Why did the chicken cross the road?
S: Oh no! I've forgotten!
S: They know what pleases the folks.
P: Say what would please you nice folks?
One member of the audience: To see you pair of idiots get off the stage!
Everyone starts boo-ing and throwing eggs, tomatoes and custard pies pelting S and P while they sing together before running off: The entertainers the stars of the show.

 

[MartyMuppets]

So would anybody like to comment on this please?