Yva Minstrel
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I have finally had a chance to sit down and read this from start to finish. While I like the story, I think I prefer your other one (the one you are currently posting). This is a really sweet story, and the interactions between the characters are really wonderful.
I did enjoy certain things in this though, like the Doc and Sprocket bits and how well they fit with the overall story. I also like the fact that Doc is meeting and speaking with the other fraggles. It was cute to get that sort of feel that he was getting to act as a sort of in-between stage for the fraggles and our world. That bit with the passport was very cute and I loved the wording for cameras. Oh and them using the doggy door to come and go. That was a neat idea, too.
What else, Sprocket's puppies. That's all so sweet there. Mokey having a baby is kind of strange for me, but she is sort of a maternal figure and I could see that she had somehow taken up where Cantus had left off. The heartbreaking thing was her suppressed grief and how she tried to conceal it with her general manner. You're quite right, she has always been the strong one during challenges and I can understand her wanting to burst at times because of how everyone expects her to behave a certain way.
What made me sad was that Cantus was no longer alive. Seemed very bittersweet somehow and also a sort of parallel to the real world. I also missed Lanfred. The empty pot just brought tears to my eyes for some reason.
If I think of anything else, I'll post again. It was a nice story, but I am looking forward to your next update. It did answer some questions I had about the other story, but in some ways, I probably should have waited until you had finished the other one before starting this one. Cantus' grave also made me want to start bawling my eyes out. He's a sort of character I can't imagine dying...he just seems so mystically there.
My impatience is sometimes a curse. Oh well, looking forward to reading more from you.
~Yva
I did enjoy certain things in this though, like the Doc and Sprocket bits and how well they fit with the overall story. I also like the fact that Doc is meeting and speaking with the other fraggles. It was cute to get that sort of feel that he was getting to act as a sort of in-between stage for the fraggles and our world. That bit with the passport was very cute and I loved the wording for cameras. Oh and them using the doggy door to come and go. That was a neat idea, too.
What else, Sprocket's puppies. That's all so sweet there. Mokey having a baby is kind of strange for me, but she is sort of a maternal figure and I could see that she had somehow taken up where Cantus had left off. The heartbreaking thing was her suppressed grief and how she tried to conceal it with her general manner. You're quite right, she has always been the strong one during challenges and I can understand her wanting to burst at times because of how everyone expects her to behave a certain way.
What made me sad was that Cantus was no longer alive. Seemed very bittersweet somehow and also a sort of parallel to the real world. I also missed Lanfred. The empty pot just brought tears to my eyes for some reason.
If I think of anything else, I'll post again. It was a nice story, but I am looking forward to your next update. It did answer some questions I had about the other story, but in some ways, I probably should have waited until you had finished the other one before starting this one. Cantus' grave also made me want to start bawling my eyes out. He's a sort of character I can't imagine dying...he just seems so mystically there.
My impatience is sometimes a curse. Oh well, looking forward to reading more from you.
~Yva