mayhemist
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My previous work was not very popular, so I took it apart and rebuilt the story from the ground up. I will admit that Christmas Mayhem was a rambling piece of worthlessness, but I hope you guys will give this one a chance. It has more than just romance being the nucleus of it. It's weird, yes, but bear with me. It's a Zoot fan fiction with the remodeled character of Alex. If you don't like Zoot, I'm sorry.
The story takes place in the beginnings of the Electric Mayhem. It's a prequel of what I think would've gone on in the lives of a young Electric Mayhem. I've set it 20 years before the Muppet Show. No Kermit or Fozzie. Sorry, again. This story features a slightly slimmer Dr. Teeth, Zoot still has his hair, and Janice has just dumped him once again. I've made Alex Janice's sister again, but have gone back and made a history with Alex and Animal to explain their unique friendship. I've tried to add depth as asked of me. I've also changed it to 3rd person point of view. Hopefully, that will add me detail. I think I've grasped Zoot's behavior a little bit better. Hope this works.
Friendship, Romance, Tragedy, and Comedy. This is Take Your Broken Wings and Learn to Fly
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He was never one for public events. The idea of running around with people made his skin crawl. He wondered why he even agreed to go. Sure, Floyd and Janice had insisted that he get out of his hole and see the world around him, but he would rather sit on his butt and play his sax. That's all that had been on his mind.
He shuffled through the crowded ballroom that was loaded with overly excited fans. He hated squeezing through people. Why had he slept when he could've met Janice and Floyd at the entrance when the door had opened? If he hadn't spent the whole day sitting on the window sill in his room feeling sorry for himself, he wouldn't have slept and therefore would be in the front row with his ex-girlfriend and his best friend.
Zoot slipped through a couple of buff bikers and slipped into the much-less crowded bar. He thought this would be an easier place to watch for Janice and Floyd. Maybe one of them would pass by looking for him, or Janice would come in to powder her nose in the bathrooms.
This was a mistake, though. Right as he approached an empty chair, several younger roadies for the headlining band bombarded him with t-shirts.
"One of kind!"
"Half price!"
"Buy! Buy! Buy!"
Then, a middle-aged blonde woman approached him and grabbed him by his narrow waist.
"Hey there, big boy," she whispered in what she thought was a seductive voice.
Disgusted, Zoot tried to slip away. Suddenly, two pairs of hands grabbed his wrists and yanked him out of the bar. In the darkness of the ballroom in a secluded corner that belonged to the smokers, Zoot was roughly spun around and was met with a huge pair of red lips and furious eyes.
"Like, rully?" Janice asked, ticked.
"Have you been in there this whole time, man?" Floyd asked, more amused than Janice.
Zoot glared at the bassist.
"No," he replied shortly.
"Well like, come on. We're not going to be able to like, scootch into the front now," Janice said as she dragged the boys back into the crowd.
"Yeah, man. If ya had gotten here earlier we would've been the first ones in here," Floyd added.
Zoot looked down at his sandals.
"Yeah, it's all my fault," he thought sadly.
Floyd helped them fight their way to the second row. Zoot was too absorbed in the smoke and lights to notice much around him. He was too wrapped up in his sad thoughts and the throbbing of the speakers. He did, however, notice the flirting going on between his two friends. Floyd was such a charmer and had this way with girls that the older band member still didn't fully grasp. Janice was easily swayed by the bassist, seeing as he told her everything she wanted to hear. Zoot mentally kicked himself for losing her. Why couldn't he keep a girlfriend? Why was it so hard for someone to love him?
"Because you aren't able to be loved, you schmuck," he thought once again.
In his deep rut, he had convinced himself that no one could love him, even though he loved everyone. He himself was incapable of hate, but he was sure capable of annoyance right now.
"Oh like, that's like, so sweet, Floyd," Janice gushed.
Zoot's eyes rolled behind his shades.
"Ladies and gentleman. Let's scream for tonight's opening band: Worn-Out Minute!" the announcer shouted on the center-stage mic.
Janice erupted with a scream and Floyd yelled happily. Zoot had never seen the band before. Janice had always brought Floyd and Animal along to see the shows. He hardly knew anything about them. He did know that Janice used to be in band.
In the beginning, it was Janice on lead vocals and guitar. Her older sister Alex, who formed the band, played bass and...something else. Zoot couldn't remember. But he did remember that Animal wrote the drum parts before finding a home with the Electric Mayhem. Other than that, he really couldn't remember much more.
The opening chord blasted and immediately caught Zoot's attention. The stage set-up was a little scary. The stage was decorated with the band's logo of an antique stopwatch and large candles dripping wax everywhere. The keyboardist, bassist, and guitarist ran out to start the song. The drummer was playing crazy, intricate rhythms and was obviously the favorite of the crowd. He reminded Zoot of Animal.
Then, out of the fog the had been drifting around on the stage floor came the centerpiece to the whole show. Holding a black Explorer and wearing a black tank, camouflage cargo shorts, fishnets and Converse high-tops, was Alex.
"I wanna hear you guys scream!" she screamed through her microphone.
The crowd erupted and Zoot wanted to hold his ears. He hated harsh noises. Why couldn't they be cool and groovy?
All the negative thoughts toward himself, his friends, and the crowd faded away when he got a good view of Janice's sister. Zoot felt his eyes grow and his jaw fall. He was immediately drawn to the female Jimmy Page look-alike. She was definitely prettier than Janice.
Zoot's eyes were glued to Alex throughout the course of the show. He felt...odd. What was it about the girl that had him feeling...wait! Zoot's heart skipped a beat. He looked down, then slowly back up at Alex and it hit him. For the first time in six miserable months, he actually felt happy, all thanks to the dark angel onstage. Zoot felt a small smile tug at his thin, frowning lips.
Warmth fluttered through his chest and butterflies once dead were resurrected in his stomach.
"Wipe the drool off your chin, man," Floyd shouted into his ear.
Dazed, Zoot's hand moved to his chin. Before he could wipe the drool that wasn't there, he quickly shook his head and turned back to stare at Floyd. The bassist burst out laughing and turned to leave with Janice. Zoot looked back up at the stage to see that the set was over and Worn-Out Minute had left. He felt his mending heart start to crack again.
"Zoot! Like, c'mon. We're gonna go see the band!" Janice called from the side of the stage.
Zoot's spirits lifted once more. Maybe, just maybe, he'd get a chance to meet this girl.
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The story takes place in the beginnings of the Electric Mayhem. It's a prequel of what I think would've gone on in the lives of a young Electric Mayhem. I've set it 20 years before the Muppet Show. No Kermit or Fozzie. Sorry, again. This story features a slightly slimmer Dr. Teeth, Zoot still has his hair, and Janice has just dumped him once again. I've made Alex Janice's sister again, but have gone back and made a history with Alex and Animal to explain their unique friendship. I've tried to add depth as asked of me. I've also changed it to 3rd person point of view. Hopefully, that will add me detail. I think I've grasped Zoot's behavior a little bit better. Hope this works.
Friendship, Romance, Tragedy, and Comedy. This is Take Your Broken Wings and Learn to Fly
__________
Prologue
He was never one for public events. The idea of running around with people made his skin crawl. He wondered why he even agreed to go. Sure, Floyd and Janice had insisted that he get out of his hole and see the world around him, but he would rather sit on his butt and play his sax. That's all that had been on his mind.
He shuffled through the crowded ballroom that was loaded with overly excited fans. He hated squeezing through people. Why had he slept when he could've met Janice and Floyd at the entrance when the door had opened? If he hadn't spent the whole day sitting on the window sill in his room feeling sorry for himself, he wouldn't have slept and therefore would be in the front row with his ex-girlfriend and his best friend.
Zoot slipped through a couple of buff bikers and slipped into the much-less crowded bar. He thought this would be an easier place to watch for Janice and Floyd. Maybe one of them would pass by looking for him, or Janice would come in to powder her nose in the bathrooms.
This was a mistake, though. Right as he approached an empty chair, several younger roadies for the headlining band bombarded him with t-shirts.
"One of kind!"
"Half price!"
"Buy! Buy! Buy!"
Then, a middle-aged blonde woman approached him and grabbed him by his narrow waist.
"Hey there, big boy," she whispered in what she thought was a seductive voice.
Disgusted, Zoot tried to slip away. Suddenly, two pairs of hands grabbed his wrists and yanked him out of the bar. In the darkness of the ballroom in a secluded corner that belonged to the smokers, Zoot was roughly spun around and was met with a huge pair of red lips and furious eyes.
"Like, rully?" Janice asked, ticked.
"Have you been in there this whole time, man?" Floyd asked, more amused than Janice.
Zoot glared at the bassist.
"No," he replied shortly.
"Well like, come on. We're not going to be able to like, scootch into the front now," Janice said as she dragged the boys back into the crowd.
"Yeah, man. If ya had gotten here earlier we would've been the first ones in here," Floyd added.
Zoot looked down at his sandals.
"Yeah, it's all my fault," he thought sadly.
Floyd helped them fight their way to the second row. Zoot was too absorbed in the smoke and lights to notice much around him. He was too wrapped up in his sad thoughts and the throbbing of the speakers. He did, however, notice the flirting going on between his two friends. Floyd was such a charmer and had this way with girls that the older band member still didn't fully grasp. Janice was easily swayed by the bassist, seeing as he told her everything she wanted to hear. Zoot mentally kicked himself for losing her. Why couldn't he keep a girlfriend? Why was it so hard for someone to love him?
"Because you aren't able to be loved, you schmuck," he thought once again.
In his deep rut, he had convinced himself that no one could love him, even though he loved everyone. He himself was incapable of hate, but he was sure capable of annoyance right now.
"Oh like, that's like, so sweet, Floyd," Janice gushed.
Zoot's eyes rolled behind his shades.
"Ladies and gentleman. Let's scream for tonight's opening band: Worn-Out Minute!" the announcer shouted on the center-stage mic.
Janice erupted with a scream and Floyd yelled happily. Zoot had never seen the band before. Janice had always brought Floyd and Animal along to see the shows. He hardly knew anything about them. He did know that Janice used to be in band.
In the beginning, it was Janice on lead vocals and guitar. Her older sister Alex, who formed the band, played bass and...something else. Zoot couldn't remember. But he did remember that Animal wrote the drum parts before finding a home with the Electric Mayhem. Other than that, he really couldn't remember much more.
The opening chord blasted and immediately caught Zoot's attention. The stage set-up was a little scary. The stage was decorated with the band's logo of an antique stopwatch and large candles dripping wax everywhere. The keyboardist, bassist, and guitarist ran out to start the song. The drummer was playing crazy, intricate rhythms and was obviously the favorite of the crowd. He reminded Zoot of Animal.
Then, out of the fog the had been drifting around on the stage floor came the centerpiece to the whole show. Holding a black Explorer and wearing a black tank, camouflage cargo shorts, fishnets and Converse high-tops, was Alex.
"I wanna hear you guys scream!" she screamed through her microphone.
The crowd erupted and Zoot wanted to hold his ears. He hated harsh noises. Why couldn't they be cool and groovy?
All the negative thoughts toward himself, his friends, and the crowd faded away when he got a good view of Janice's sister. Zoot felt his eyes grow and his jaw fall. He was immediately drawn to the female Jimmy Page look-alike. She was definitely prettier than Janice.
Zoot's eyes were glued to Alex throughout the course of the show. He felt...odd. What was it about the girl that had him feeling...wait! Zoot's heart skipped a beat. He looked down, then slowly back up at Alex and it hit him. For the first time in six miserable months, he actually felt happy, all thanks to the dark angel onstage. Zoot felt a small smile tug at his thin, frowning lips.
Warmth fluttered through his chest and butterflies once dead were resurrected in his stomach.
"Wipe the drool off your chin, man," Floyd shouted into his ear.
Dazed, Zoot's hand moved to his chin. Before he could wipe the drool that wasn't there, he quickly shook his head and turned back to stare at Floyd. The bassist burst out laughing and turned to leave with Janice. Zoot looked back up at the stage to see that the set was over and Worn-Out Minute had left. He felt his mending heart start to crack again.
"Zoot! Like, c'mon. We're gonna go see the band!" Janice called from the side of the stage.
Zoot's spirits lifted once more. Maybe, just maybe, he'd get a chance to meet this girl.
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