My first movie

[Krazedmuppet]

As some supportive criticism, you have good martial and something interesting to say, but you need to work on your editing, needs to be a bit faster paced, someone with a short attention span wont watch all of it. You’ll get more people to listen and watch then! I know this is your first movie, and your only going to get better from here on out, but you can only do that by some constructive criticism.

also for your narrative parts, you NEED a better recording or a better microphone, TOOOOOOO much distortion to the point where you cant understand (or even care to understand) what you have to say. you have a good strong voice (watching the videos of just you) you have a cute accent (had to look up where it was from! is it NJ or RI? I thought it was NY...) but you cant hear it over the noise! People are more likely to stop watching for that reason alone, no matter how cool the information is.

Bottom line- Good material, good script, good footage of the comedians BAD EDITING- an easy thing to fix and learn to do. (money helps this, but what new director has that? lol) Do that, and you have some real potential. (it also helps if you can take critisism! *runs and hides*)

Ive worked on a few student movie sets, taken some script writing classes, and helped read over some friends scrips and movies. In class this is what we do for eachother, good or bad, you need to hear it for you to get better. I hope this helped a little and your not too mad at me.

 

[muppetfan89]

As some supportive criticism, you have good martial and something interesting to say, but you need to work on your editing, needs to be a bit faster paced, someone with a short attention span wont watch all of it. You’ll get more people to listen and watch then! I know this is your first movie, and your only going to get better from here on out, but you can only do that by some constructive criticism.

also for your narrative parts, you NEED a better recording or a better microphone, TOOOOOOO much distortion to the point where you cant understand (or even care to understand) what you have to say. you have a good strong voice (watching the videos of just you) you have a cute accent (had to look up where it was from! is it NJ or RI? I thought it was NY...) but you cant hear it over the noise! People are more likely to stop watching for that reason alone, no matter how cool the information is.

Bottom line- Good material, good script, good footage of the comedians BAD EDITING- an easy thing to fix and learn to do. (money helps this, but what new director has that? lol) Do that, and you have some real potential. (it also helps if you can take critisism! *runs and hides*)

Ive worked on a few student movie sets, taken some script writing classes, and helped read over some friends scrips and movies. In class this is what we do for eachother, good or bad, you need to hear it for you to get better. I hope this helped a little and your not too mad at me.

thank you so much for your honesty. Alot of people on the internet will just say good things to be nice, but I'm really glad somebody told me some things I could work on. I already know the good points of my film, but I wasn't getting enough of what needs to be improved. Thank you again!

btw, yes I was born and raised in Jersey and moved to RI a few years ago.

 

[Krazedmuppet]

Oh one more thing, I love your claymation BUT you need more still frames per second, meaning I know you spent 2 hours on that- you need to spend like 4. Claymation is slow and painful, but its so rewarding if done right. The reason I say this is because I was watching your video and you said you wanted to do more clay, and the trick to that is, more frames per second or more sill pictures and faster speed. I love how you said you put yourself into the logo, and thats the most important thing. I love your voice overs!

 

[muppetfan89]

Oh one more thing, I love your claymation BUT you need more still frames per second, meaning I know you spent 2 hours on that- you need to spend like 4. Claymation is slow and painful, but its so rewarding if done right. The reason I say this is because I was watching your video and you said you wanted to do more clay, and the trick to that is, more frames per second or more sill pictures and faster speed. I love how you said you put yourself into the logo, and thats the most important thing. I love your voice overs!

so, how many pictures do i take of single position?

 

[stephenjlizard]

I would suggest to take 15 to 20 pictures per second.

 

[muppetfan89]

I would suggest to take 15 to 20 pictures per second.

yeah but does that mean to take 15-20 pictures for a single position.

in other words, do i take 15-20 pictures of the character just standing and then another 15-20 pictures for the next movment.

 

[Ilikemuppets]

But don't they have cameras that move at the speed?

 

[Krazedmuppet]

But don't they have cameras that move at the speed?

Some cameras, but if you only have a still camera, you can do that too.

and no not the same position, just smaller movement between- so like... wait try this first, make a flip book- that would be a good excercise. Make one of a guy doing jumping jacks (the corner of note books works great for this) if you draw the guy in 4 fames- as in one with his arms up, one to his sides, and then one down, then one at his sides again (then start over) you will see that you get your point across that he is doing jumping jacks, but its not fluid. next draw them in 5 frames- up, halfway up, strait out, half way down, and then down (then do 5 more but in reverse) and you will see that it flows better. Thats like claymation, its not how many of the same you have, but how many slight movements in between actions, the more you have the more it will not look like photographs of clay but of an actual clay person who moves on his own

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fwJpoOxD0EE

Watch this video, see how seemless the blue guy moves around? there are a LOT of shots but each time it is moved so slightly (like i said, its painful) but look at the result!

 

[muppetfan89]

Some cameras, but if you only have a still camera, you can do that too.

and no not the same position, just smaller movement between- so like... wait try this first, make a flip book- that would be a good excercise. Make one of a guy doing jumping jacks (the corner of note books works great for this) if you draw the guy in 4 fames- as in one with his arms up, one to his sides, and then one down, then one at his sides again (then start over) you will see that you get your point across that he is doing jumping jacks, but its not fluid. next draw them in 5 frames- up, halfway up, strait out, half way down, and then down (then do 5 more but in reverse) and you will see that it flows better. Thats like claymation, its not how many of the same you have, but how many slight movements in between actions, the more you have the more it will not look like photographs of clay but of an actual clay person who moves on his own

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fwJpoOxD0EE

Watch this video, see how seemless the blue guy moves around? there are a LOT of shots but each time it is moved so slightly (like i said, its painful) but look at the result!

oh, I see, you mean one picture of the position, but more slight movements to make it flow better, becuase I had a little to many sudden movements.

 

[Ilikemuppets]

That was a very awesome little film demonstration! I enjoyed it very much!